Poems And Other Creative Stuff!!!

[Baby Grand]

Hey guys,

I was just thinking, i dont really post on here much, an i am keen as mustard about writing!! Sooooo i was thinking i hate showing people i know what i have to write, so i thought maybe you guys could tell me what ya think about some of the stuff iv done and also show me some of the stuff you've done!!!

Its not a comp though just somewhere were we can all shine!!! So i spose cause im the first i should start it off, and it would be rather appreciated if you could maybe rate or be honest of what you think about it.

Alright this is a poem i wrote a few weeks ago, its for a friend and she always seems down about something and i know other people kinda dont like the fact that she is so moody, im not a really close friend though, so i kinda see all of this from a distance, i wrote this as something i would like to do for her, here it is.................

P.S Iv only just started writing, so constructive input would help a lot, thanks guyysssss!!!!


How very precious and intricate a relationship can be,
Its part of the tug of war in life, the dirt making things harder to see,

For it to bring you to the ground and sometimes to the knees ,
And to find you could rise up again, after just mumbling a simple plee,

See its funny, how we always beg for mercy at the point of a blade,
And regret everything, including all the hurtful things we meant to say,

If almost once everyday we could maybe rewind,
Or freeze a point in time, just to read our own minds,

You’ve got to know we all experience little thing’s, like somebody else that we may know,
But until you open your mouth, I think maybe sometimes it won’t show,

If you think your alone, well your not, I understand,
So just close your eyes and reach out with your hand,

Ill hold it for you and provide a close ear,
And for every fear you show, I think id shed with you, the same tears,

People experience these things everyday,
But until we wipe our eyes dry, we wont see the right way,

Please don’t be misled, because I won’t show pity on you,
Hold strong, you'll understand, that we aren’t the only two,

Back to reality, were still down on our knees,
Try forget all your fears and be happy your are here,

To always be seen alert and with eyes widely lit,
Remeber a simple little smile can make things easy to forget,

You see the little games we play will misdirect all of our days,
Making it seem, that too much is in the way,

Take it easy, slow down and ill walk behind in your steps
Ill follow your lead until my presence you’ll forget

It wont be that hard if you know where to walk
Follow your heart or just ask and we can talk

All that i want you to remember, is when your scared of kneeling down in the sand,
Just close your eyes again, then reach out with your hand.

[whiskey]

I love it! keep writing! got any more stuff to share? it's really fantastic!

[M.D]

I've decided to post one of my fav poems, it's not written by me (altho I do write a lot) but by someone I really admire...

Moving....

Moving
Every minute tells a story
Some are in my head and some are in the reflection of the headlights that shine in on me
I'm stretched out in the backseat of the car
I could look out forever at the houses and the train tracks
Cold beer and cigarettes, French fries, cold coffee, pancakes and potatoes chips, baked potatoes, iceberg lettuce and lots of aspirin
These are the ingredients of a well-stayed, extended trip into the world of someone you know very well who is very sick
Chicken broth and gelatin, morphine and macaroni & cheese, mashed potatoes and codeine, ice chips and Ensure the adult supplement for optimum living
Pearls of a demoness, ever seeming transition
You, sinking deeper and deeper into the centre of the bed,
There’s pillows placed between your legs to keep them from bruising or breaking each other
Your circulation crawls slowly up and out of your body, Your hands and feet grow cold first, and your breaths become more and more shallow.
Blood tests, chemotherapy, cat scans, radiation, surgery, amputation, spinal taps, physical therapy, bariums, probes, catheters, pills, Iv’s and drips, Bed pans, fresh flowers, id bracelets, sponge baths, phone calls, bandana’s, scarf and a hat, wheel chair, sun block, sore muscles, vomiting, hallucinations, confusion, despair, exhaustion, shortness of breath, vertigo and lots of television.
Rising out over a stretch of highway next to a disco, a senior citizen centre, a k-mart and the loveliest crest of the ocean.
There are dolphins and raccoons there, and beautiful gardens.
I lost you to the heavens; I sit here on earth like a token, like some kind of souvenir of your living, like stardust or gasoline.
It’s late in the evening, now, in my discontent, and I‘m sure now that grieving and healing are the same thing sometimes and, magic and death are the same thing sometimes, and, trusting and failing are the same thing sometimes.

Jorja Fox

[Missah]

hey how long has this art/literature subject been in the forum...its kool

go the forum!

[Missah]

your poems are all really good!

[Baby Grand]

wow!!! those two poems are really good eh!!! one day i to will write like that, but until that day comes my little grasshoppers...................actually i dont know what i was about to say then :o hmmm :confused:

Anyway keep em coming..............

[bek]

wow!!! those two poems are really good eh!!! one day i to will write like that, but until that day comes my little grasshoppers...................actually i dont know what i was about to say then :o hmmm :confused:

Anyway keep em coming..............

I think your poem that you wrote for your friend is amazing!!!! its powerful and emotive and i'm sure if you shared it with your friend it would really help her! I really admire your courage in sharing your work...cos its never easy to write something personal and then put it out there for anyone to read! love it...keep em coming!!

[Cheyne]

Commodification of death and destruction
Compells through creating a story of seduction
Seductive images of suffering and pain
Are brought to the fore again and again.

As propaganda and rumour are intertwined with fear
We're given the illusion that terror is near
What we see however is not one of us
Until the casualties of that Tavastock bus.

But the other is not one of them per se
Its a projection of self thats brought to the frey
To categorise is to minimise
Complexity that is easy to simplify.

We define ourselves by what we are not
And what we are not is that child thats been shot
We can feel cathartic we will sympathise
But it is ignorant to try to empathise

In our comfortable world uncertainty is limited
Death is distanced, violence prohibited
To understand would mean to experience the disorder
Of living withing the confines of a third world border.

As the spectacle of terror draws to a close
A blonde headed skeleton strikes a pose
We see Oil of Olay promising to beautify
In our artificial world its easy to commodify

[Seven]

Heres a poem from chiney he wrote for pucky while to tried to get lucky after rejected by chucky ;)



roses r red but ella is blue
she was once naughty
but now shes innocent like glue

:p

[Baby Grand]

hey cheyne, did you pen that one yourself, its pretty deep!!! i really really like it.

[Seven]

hey cheyne, did you pen that one yourself, its pretty deep!!! i really really like it.



ohh hell yeah he wrote that himself... he also wrote that hot song that goes like "dont call me baby grand.. i belong to cheney...dont call me baby grand..."


:D

[Baby Grand]

Sorry bout the double post, but i got another one..............

Write down some words, wrap it up and put it in a bottle,
Seal the lid, let go of it, what’s done is done, through it away, you know you meant well,

Put in on a beach somewhere and I bet, on a peaceful day the wind will let it float away,
Your secret kept forever untouched, let go of the bottle, don’t let it stay,

For whoever will open, will read the words, for it never will mean to them much,
Words put together the very same way, a bit confusing in a situation as such,

For you led a secret on journey so tough and bold, could it please just gently float away,
Because one day it might come crashing down, drowning deep, never to see light of another day,

The bottle may also wash up on a shore, in a paradise we may never see,
Because a paradise within lies great secrets that hold, something a dry desert could never keep,

The day for you will end with peace, knowing you let go of something so precious
You could have lived your secret through life, but bottled up, it wont touch the desert

Now the words you wrote will hold some truth, until the very last second of its final day,
Its owner, gave that piece of paper life, the very minute it caught the breeze, guiding it gently it floated away…..

[Cheyne]

hey cheyne, did you pen that one yourself, its pretty deep!!! i really really like it.

hey thanku... armed with my sword I slayed one of societys demons.. i didnt think it was that great... like i could polish it up a bit but not bad for 20 mins worth.

[JOLENE]

wish i had talent :D

[what]

cheyne uses big words.
not like me.

[Bocks]

cat
mouse
bang bang

[Seven]

cat
mouse
bang bang


isnt that a song..... blah blah blah and she went bang bang and then she bang bang and then la la la :confused:


I love that song!!! no idea who sings it but...

[what]

could it possibly be bang bang by nancy sinatra that you are talking about? recently re-discovered on the j airwaves cos someone remixed it.
i like the original. it's on the kill bill soundtrack

[Tinkers]

i dunno, it sounds like that ashlea simpson song 'you make me want to lalala on the floor in the bedroom...' to me.

[Seven]

could it possibly be bang bang by nancy sinatra that you are talking about? recently re-discovered on the j airwaves cos someone remixed it.
i like the original. it's on the kill bill soundtrack


ohh HOLD UP!!! yeah i think thats it... kill bill bang bang... yeah i love that song i want it!! :)

[what]

ohh HOLD UP!!! yeah i think thats it... kill bill bang bang... yeah i love that song i want it!! :)
WELL DO THE RIGHT LEGAL THING AND DOWNLOAD IT THEN!!!
geeze.

[Seven]

WELL DO THE RIGHT LEGAL THING AND DOWNLOAD IT THEN!!!
geeze.


words of wisdom again... i thought the legal way was to walk into hmv and walk out with out paying for it ... WHATTHE :eek:

[Baby Grand]

Seems like forever an a minute since anyone last posted in here, so i guess i might add another scribble/dribble to waste some time...........


Sand will move, blown by the winds that aren’t there,
Still even though we cant see it, we feel it move, its in the air

Some things are taken for granted, even when we don’t see why its lying around
But even when we can see it there, we walk away, leaving it to stay on the ground

Should we believe in things that aren’t, but always prove that their eventually needed
I don’t think that I would change the way I cared for you, even if I couldn’t see you

I would graze my knees, if I had to, just to see your eyes, if you where on the ground
And id try with all I have inside, just to pick you up, when no one else is around

I laugh when I think of the stupid things we do, but only humans learn by their mistakes
And eventually, everyone makes the decision, where it hurts so much, that you feel your heart break

With a tear, a smile, a rose, or a kiss, everyone can experience the different feeling, that we all hold inside
But when its time to tell the one, we all get too scared, when we all know there’s nothing we should hide

An as the day gets nearer to where we get what we want, we still stumble around, until were flat on the floor
When in reality, all we really need is the thing that picks us up, before it leaves & walks out trough the door

[Shenelle]

wow guys - im so amazed! I used to write - but gave it up a long time ago! Reading your stuff has made me want to start writing again! I used to write songs - maybe I should start it again!

U guys are inspiring! Well done!

[Baby Grand]

haha, thats really good Shenelle, i think you should start writing again, its a very good talent!! that way you can post on this thread & i wont feel so lonely!!!

Dunjay.
rebirth, yes!!!

[:: katie b ::]

the name echos so sweetly throughout the night
cheyne...cheyne..

i hear a whisper a turn so soundly,
to only find to boy i pine for is not there,
i hear only the wind mutter
cheyne.. cheyne...

to noone have i ever felt a kiss so tender
my love is true
it will never teather
cheyne... cheyne

to leave this now
is what i must do,
i seal it with a kiss..
i kinda smell like a shoe..
cheyne.. cheyne..
I LOVE YOU!

LOVE KATIE!

[Tribal_Drummer]

Bak. Derk-derka ala. Derka derka, Mohammed Jihad. Baka sherpa-sherpa. Abaka-la.
Ohhh! Derka derka derka!

[what]

he's heading south east down berka dakalaka street!!!

[Tribal_Drummer]

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